March Story Wall Experience – Jez

I greatly appreciated the input of those who participated in my story wall at the March Journey meeting. I had brought forward a YA science fiction novel that I am in the process of editing, hoping to focus on one chapter/element in particular which has given me significant issues in previous drafts.

I had gone into the exercise with little preparation, other than having known my story inside out from multiple drafts. I began by describing the world in which my story is set, then gave a description of four characters. I then gave a synopsis of the novel as a whole, then went into specifics on the first three chapters, leading up to the area where I was having difficulty. My biggest stumbling block was figuring out a way to get the two main characters into the same place and situation, but still feel natural. The group gave me excellent feedback on the novel and characters and provided me with a few different options for how to change the problem chapter.

My advice for members looking to participate in story walls in the future is to go into it with a good synopsis and know beforehand what your biggest issues are so that the group can better focus on them. I would say that one should not over-prepare or bog the listeners down with too many details, as these could distract from the actual issue. I brought up additional plot points and arcs as necessary in response to questions, but I think what made the exercise work for my particular group was that I needed new ideas and I allowed the group freedom to explore ideas without worrying how they may or may not affect other parts of my novel—that’s for me to work on after the story wall. I think it also helps to have a small, but dedicated group. Too large of a group and the participants can get off-topic or hung up on specific things, too small and there are less ideas to be pitched.

Overall, I think this was a very good exercise for me and my novel (especially at this stage in editing) because it allowed me to receive feedback from other writers on my novel as a whole (with some much-appreciated validation!), but it also allowed me to talk out some issues and receive new ideas on how to approach them. I think the best part for me, however, was receiving questions from the group, which made me focus on certain points, figure out things to explain better in the story, or to simply better explain my premise to the group.

Again, I am very thankful to my group and really appreciated the time they put in trying to help me work through this chapter. Your ideas were great and I can’t wait to play around with them and see which one ends up clicking into the story.

The Writing Journey’s Story Wall Exercise

At the latest monthly meeting of the Journey, I participated in the Story Wall exercise. For those who don’t know, the Story Wall is a process that is designed to give feedback and writing advice to authors where their stories need it the most.  The general premise is to lay out the plot points of your story, along with the main characters and overall story arc, and present it to a group of your fellow authors. The story that is best suited to the Story Wall is one that has something missing, has a question attached to it, or is causing the author vexation. It’s best to come to the Story Wall with an open mind ready for constructive criticism.

For my Story Wall exercise, I presented my 2013 NaNoWriMo novel — The Other Rhinebeck — for which I had just finished the first draft. Because I had just finished my first draft, and because much of that draft was written during the mad dash of November, I knew that my story was in need of some help. I went into the exercise asking for some plot doctoring in a few places, and to test if my story premise was a viable, interesting one.

To prepare for the Story Wall, I went through my draft, chapter by chapter, and wrote out the main plot points that happen in each section. Then I put those plot points each on a separate page of a Google Doc, in large typeface, so that my group members would be able to read through the bones of the story. In addition to compiling the plot points, I made a list of main characters, a list of supporting characters, a cheat sheet for how my magical world works, and a quick description of the novel’s overall premise.

My experience with the Story Wall was helpful and a very vindicating. My group members had some great advice for me and offered up really exciting plot point alternatives where I thought that I had some holes. The best part of the experience was hearing people get interested in the world and characters that I had been writing about for the past six months. Hearing their feedback made me believe that I have a pretty good first draft of a novel. Now I just need to edit it!

If you’re thinking of doing the Story Wall, or if you’ve already signed up and are wondering how to prepare, I would advise you to simply read through and reacquaint yourself with your novel. Once you know more about the novel and the world you’ve been writing inside, you can better pitch it to your group members. Then write out what your group needs to know, either on note cards or typed out, or even in a PowerPoint presentation. Know where you need help, and emphasize those areas. Your group members will be looking to you for guidance, so point them in the right direction and they’re sure to give you great feedback.

If you’re on the fence, I hope that you choose to try out the Story Wall. I found the experience exciting and helpful (if nervewracking at first), and would definitely recommend it.

— Mary Egan

Writing exercise: images – 2014-03-06

Sometimes we do writing exercises based on images we’ve gleaned from the Internet. At this week’s jabber chat, we looked at choosing one or both of these two images: a picture of a girl encountering a large, burly, anthropogenic tree or a guy holding open a briefcase filled with something brilliant.

Here are our unedited entries (each written in about 15 minutes). Feel free to add yours in the comments!

Ajey

Mueller, the old professor, pulled out his collapsible PATT (Peek-Around-The-Corner, in spy-speak) mirror, extended it, and took a look down the corridor. Seeing that it was empty, he silently snuck to the next doorway. He hopped from doorway to doorway, crisscrossing the corridor, until he reached the end. There was the sound of a violin being played in one of the soundproof music rooms. Mueller liked violins, not so much for their beauty, but because they could hold secret messages.

Listening carefully for a few more moments, Mueller concluded that there either were no other people in the building or that what people might be in the building were busy in their own musical worlds, in their own soundproof practicing rooms. At this point, he tore off the silicone mask to reveal a much younger, and much more dangerous man. Mueller the spy.

Catherine

He said little, once I agreed. He simply opened his briefcase.

The contents blinded me, and I understood why he wore the odd glasses with opaque lenses. He looked off into the distance, waiting, while I tried to focus on what he had in the case.

“Bright,” I said.

He made a noise. Possibly it was a grunt acknowledging the truth of my observation.

“It’s for sale, you said?”

He nodded.

I couldn’t even see what it was, to tell the truth. I’m used to being a bit behind the eight-ball. I usually try to vamp until I figure out what everyone else is so interested in. Sometimes I figure it out. Often I don’t. I’ve gotten tired of pretending. Finally I said, “People want this?”

He nodded again.

“I don’t get it.”

He shrugged. No skin off his nose, he seemed to imply. Of course, that made me all the more convinced that his merchandise must be very valuable. Otherwise he’d try harder to sell it to me, wouldn’t he?

“I’ll take it,” I said. “You said it was 99 dollars?”

“A bargain,” he said.

He shouldn’t have spoken. I suddenly had second thoughts.

It’s tough, not knowing who to believe, or what really has any worth. That was how I’d ended up in this dive bar, with only 101 dollars to my name.

Frank

Sally loved the woods. Especially her woods. The woods behind her mother;s home was what she called her own. Since her parents had divorced it was the only place that she really felt in control. In her woods the trees and the ground would do whatever she wanted. Most of the time everything went according to plan, but sometimes it was different.

Saturday morning Sally got up and did her usual routine. She ate breakfast with her mom, watched a cartoon, then got dressed to spend a day with her friends in her woods. She combed her hair, put on a light yellow dress to keep her cool in the hot summer weather, then gave her mom a peck on the cheek.

“I’m going to play with my trees,” she sang. she stood on her toes and let her mom give her a tight squeeze.

“Stay close to the house,” she said giving her a hard look. “Last time you got so deep in the woods that I had to go out searching for you and it took me an hour. It practically ruined my lunch.”

“Sorry mommy,” she said as she ran out of the door. The weather was perfect. The sun was out. A dry breeze was keeping everything cool, and the woods were beckoning her.

She ran into the shade of the trees and laughed as she threw her hands out, touching the bark of all her friends as she ran by.

“Hello everyone!” she yelled. “I’ve missed you.” The leaves of the trees all rustled in response and she felt their joy as she ran among them.

Deeper into the forest she ran, jumping over a brook, and clamboring up to the top of the hill that rose above the rest of the forest. It was here that her most special friend live. Maximilian was a massive old tree that she loved most dearly. She would sit in his arms for hours and watch the world go by. Last time she was here she stayed long past the time she was supposed to go home. In fact t was getting dark and shew as still sitting in his branches looking at the evening sky. As the first star appeared she wished, more than she had ever wished for anything before, that Maximilian would be able to move, to be able to hug her if she wished. She giggled as she made it, but she knew there was magic somewhere. She just hoped it would help her with her special wish.

Sally ran up the hill, reached the top, and yelled. “Hey Max…” but her voice trailed off. Max was gone.

She ran all around the top of the hill looking for him, but he was no where to be found. She went so far as to look behind a tree. As she looked around a rather old and large pine she heard a loud rustling and dragging sound.

“Sally,” a booming voice said.

Tim

They were poor, not quite desperately so. Alice’s gruff woodcutter father shielded her and little Giuseppe as best he could from that. Alice would take Giuseppe a little ways into the woods to gather edible plants and mushrooms and roots. Giuseppe was too young to be of much help, but was barely old enough to not be too much of a distraction. Alice’s father worked hard to cut enough wood for his family and to sell in the village.

Their own rude, little cottage was half a day’s walk from the village, so it was up to Alice to take care of herself and her brother while her father was gone during the day.

Though she missed her father, Alice enjoyed the freedom and didn’t mind the cold too much, despite her thin, ragged clothes. Giuseppe adored his older sister, tried to emulate her accuracy with her leather sling, though more often then not his stones ended up tumbling to the leafy forest floor.

It was on a gently cold autumn day that Alice’s wandering took her past the cold stream (Giuseppe didn’t cry even though his pants were wet through from falling off of one of the stepping stones). The sun’s dim light filtered through the tree branches overhead. It was almost time for a small lunch.

Alice glanced at her basket. It was less than half full. A small handful of smelly berries, some mushrooms that were only somewhat shriveled and a rock lobster that still wiggled now and then, testing its bonds of vine.

“Would you care to join me for some lunch?”

Alice looked up in surprise. Sitting with his back against tree was a little man wearing a tall hat of dark green fur with a wide brim.

“Is that roast duck?” Giuseppe’s little voice was filled with awe.

“It is indeed,” the man said smiling. “Come, sit beside me.”

“We don’t have much to share, I’m afraid,” Alice said, trying to remember her father’s warnings about strangers.

“You need not share anything of what you have,” the man said. “I am here only to grant your wishes.” But something glinted in his eyes as he said it and Alice shivered in spite of herself.

Diana

When I was a child
I wrote poetry of dreams

I put the stars to bed with stories of trees
that walked and cried and felt anger
like burning kindling, happiness
like bubbles
and every character
was a child
lost in the woods

I wrote for her
who brought me golden light
she whispered rhymes
and metaphors and gave
me worlds

I dreamt of poetry
as a child
to wake with words